Jamie Falcon

Seriously an amazing song. The only critical thing I have to say, has pretty much already been said -- ditch the farm animals. =] Well, at least the chicken. Maybe ...

Thought it was interesting, too lazy to go all into the whole critiquing grammar and such, unless you want that? You can PM me, and I will. I am very ...

This was an extremely interesting read. I don't have to correct much, seeing as several people above me have done so already. I'm just wondering if this really fits into ...

I liked this piece a lot. I thought it was beautiful. I don't have too much con-crit to give. That way you can hear the echoes of the bangs as ...

I agree with SeraphTree that you need to get into his head more, and show some more depth with your character. I was very confused throughout the piece, mainly because ...